can't you tell from how I look at you?
I dislike you
is it not evident from my writing to you?l ke you
do you feel our chemistry during Chemistry?
(i)Phone, (i)Pad, used w thout ma nta ning eye-contact.
How my words do not suff ce from that beh nd a screen,
your presence g ves me conf dence to present what s w th n.
As I walk to your s de, my fears beg n to subs de,
my worr es res de, I say with conf dence and pr de,
love you.
"Un-confuse" it:
This poem has a very strong and a very interesting structure
to it. The theme it is under is love. However, the poem begins with “I hate
you”. This is certainly used to confuse the reader. However, that is what we
have chosen to do. Our group has used the idea of starting off with a negative
emotion to begin the poem. This is used in juxtaposition of a sweet love. It
begins off with the writer hating a certain person. However, the writer slowly
realizes that he/she likes that person and later on, finds out that it is love.
However, at the beginning, the
writer is unsure of his feelings towards this girl. This is why he asks so many
rhetorical questions in the structure. However, his feelings slowly progress in
a positive and gentle mood. From hating the girl, to disliking her, to being
fine with her, to liking her, and soon Love. The fast changes also reflect to
how the audience is meant to be for teenagers, where youths nowadays be it boys
or girls have violent and changing moods which cannot be comprehended. In each
line before love (eg; I hate you) there is no punctuation, or a full stop to
signify that a point has been brought up. This also contributes to the fact
that the writer is unsure of his feelings towards the girl, using enjambment. However,
in the end when the writer finally says “I love you” there is a full stop, to
signify that he is confident and absolutely sure of his feelings towards this
girl. The poem also has a distinctive 14 line flow, much like in a sonnet (a
poem of love). This fitting as our poem is one of love, but even though it is,
it doesn’t follow the elaborate rhyme scheme. This shows how love can also be
free without restrain. One of the important points that we have brought up in
our poem, is the fact that towards the end of the poem, the letter “I” begins
to disappear. In the beginning, the letter “I” remains in the lines as they are
used to signify that the writer does not have a certain liking for the girl,
yet. However, as the poem
progresses, the writer finds out that he indeed loves her. As such, they are
meant to be in a relationship. “I” or “She” is now “Us” and there is no “I” in
“Us”. Thus, to symbolize that the writer isn’t just an “I”, but rather “We”, we
have taken out all the “I”’s towards the end of the poem. Love isn’t about “I”,
it’s about “Us”. The cancellation of the “I” also signifies how in love, our
thinking is no longer centered around ourselves but around the one we love,
which is also why the word “you” is repeated more times than the letter “I” due
to the cancellation.
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